Grizzell:
:D it was interesting to read your post. i think that the first paragraph/ introduction was an interesting summary of the book but it is somewhat a spoiler. i think you should do what sutherland recommended, which is to talk about the entire summary but without revealing any names. the rest of your essay was nice. i think that you should switch the second and third paragraph to make it more interesting. however, that is just a suggestion. you don't need to do it if you don't want to. it is OK the way it is already.
Crystal:
you write such perfect essays that there is no need to correct T_T. i think that you summarized a bit too much. too detailed from how i see it. its as if we know every single little thing that happened in the book. i like how you connect it to Macbeth. i suggest that you emphasize what you wrote near the end, about human nature and take away some of the summary.... kinda like finish your essay in a way that makes readers interested in actually reading the book even after the detailed summary
Amber:
Hi evil XD you introduction is good. i like how you gave the summary but not the characters name. it is good overall but i think you can say more about the weakness area and maybe cite something to show your point.
